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雅思写作9分范文点评:警察佩戴枪支

下面这篇在2004年考过两次,内容比较难写,很多考生都构思不出内容,因此,我请我的美国朋友按照雅思 作文的套路写了篇范文,大家可以学习一下里面的语言和内容。
  Unlike most countries, the police in the United Kingdom do not normally carry guns. Some people think it leaves the citizens unprotected, while others believe that this practice reduces the overall violence in society. Discuss both views and use your own experience and evidence.
  Unlike most countries, the police in the United Kingdom do not normally carry guns. Some people think it leaves citizens unprotected, while others believe that this practi c e reduces the overall violence in society. Police having guns however is an issue secondary to criminals having guns. (45words)
  结构分析: 2+ 1 ” 模式,最后一句为主题句,明确地表达了自己的观点。但是,前两句的问题很严重,即照抄了题目。(这可能是我和老外没有沟通好,在他所写的所有例文中都出现了类似的情况,大家千万不要学!!!)

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  Because criminals usually have access to guns, police officers need them in order to control crime. If police in the U.K. are able to go without guns and not have crime getting completely out of control then they have already set a fine example that other countries should follow. The fact that they are able to do this is an indication of their ability to control the flow of guns to the general populace and this makes citizens safer than anything else. To a civilian, taking guns away from criminals is more important than giving them to police. (98words)
  For places that are not able to, or are unwilling to control this availability of guns to criminals, police have no choice. Countries with weak or ineffective gun laws, or countries bordering such countries, like Mexico which has strong gun laws, but virtually no way to prevent them from being smuggled over the border from the U.S., need a police force that is not only armed, but is armed better than the criminals. This “domestic arms race” is the fate of any country that does not realize that civilians have no need of being armed and should have no access to weapons whatsoever.(103words) 作文批改系统,易优作文批改、作文点评、作文打分系统,<a href=https://www.euzW.net/jiaoshoulanmu/>易优作文批改</A>
  The root of the problem is embarrassingly corrupt governments and ineffective half-measures taken to control the circulation of guns, which allows criminals to easily come into possession of guns. Nations around the world should hope to someday reach the point where their police force can afford not to carry guns and still be effective. (54words)
  文章后几段结构比较清晰,未加点评,红色部分为段落主题句。

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evidence ['evidəns] 想一想再看
n. 根据,证据
v. 证实,证明
联想记忆 X 单词evidence 联想记忆:
e出+vid看+ence→[明显的证据]证据,证人
violence ['vaiələns] 想一想再看
n. 暴力,猛烈,强暴,暴行

prevent [pri'vent] 想一想再看
v. 预防,防止
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pre预先+vent来→预先来到→抢先一步,防止别人→防止,阻止
possession [pə'zeʃən] 想一想再看
n. 财产,所有,拥有
联想记忆 X 单词possession 联想记忆:
源于:possess(v 占有;拥有)
circulation [.sə:kju'leiʃən] 想一想再看
n. 流通,循环,发行量,消息传播
联想记忆 X 单词circulation 联想记忆:
circulate圆,环+ion→发生,流通
unwilling ['ʌn'wiliŋ] 想一想再看
adj. 不愿意的

issue ['iʃju:] 想一想再看
n. 发行物,期刊号,争论点
vi. & vt

ineffective [ini'fektiv] 想一想再看
adj. 无效的,无能的,效率低的
联想记忆 X 单词ineffective 联想记忆:
in不+effective(adj 有效的);effect(n 效果)fect作->无效的, 无能的 语文成绩好,书法少不了,学书法,推荐<A https://www.euZw.net/miniform/type_3.html>易优练字</a>
civilian [si'viljən] 想一想再看
adj. 平民的
n. 罗马法专家,平民
联想记忆 X 单词civilian 联想记忆:
civil公民的+ian表名词,“某种人”→平民
border ['bɔ:də] 想一想再看
n. 边界,边境,边缘
vt. 与 ... 接

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