中考英语话题作文：为祖国成就而自豪

【背景介绍】

从过去几年来看，中国经济在国内国际复杂形势下仍然保持了较高增速，经济结构不断优化升级，经济总量达到了82.7万亿元，贫困人口减少了6800多万，城镇新增就业6600万人以上，重点城市重污染天数减少一半等，都为中国经济持续发展创造了良好基础。在他看来，这些令人瞩目的成绩在中国和当代世界发展历史上都是不曾有过的，40年的改革开放使中国在迈向全面建成小康社会的道路上又进了一步。

【佳作赏析】

A

2021年是中国共产党成立100周年, 盛世华诞, 举国同庆。在这100年里, 我国发生了翻天覆地的变化并取得了举世瞩目的成就。请根据下表提示, 以The Changes in China为题, 写一篇80词左右的短文。

要求：

1. 文中不得出现真实的人名和校名; 

2. 语言通顺, 要点齐全, 意思连贯,条理清楚。

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The Changes in China

With the development of society, China has changed a lot. In the past, the houses were old and small and people were leading a poor life. The roads were so narrow that the traffic wasn’t convenient at all. What’s worse, the communication developed slowly and people had little entertainment activities.

Now, great changes have taken place. We live in big and bright houses with well-suited furniture. More and more families have cars. The roads are becoming wider and wider which make the traffic more and more convenient. Besides, people have more kinds of activities.

I believe our country will become more and more beautiful.

【详解】

1.题干解读：本文紧跟时代热点，描写新中国的变化。材料的表格内容清晰，分别从两方面进行描写，过去和现在。同学们要捋清楚思路，在写作的过程中，将过去与现在进行对比，符合逻辑即可。

2.例文点评：本文采用三段式，段落布局清晰，首段描写过去，主要采用一般过去时。而第二段对现在进行描写，采用一般现在时。与第一段的内容进行一一对应。第三段则是对将来的展望。

3.高分亮点：

短语：with the development of；lead a poor life；What’s worse。

句型：so…that；which引导定语从句。

B

2020年新冠肺炎疫情发生后，为了更好地保障同桌就餐人员的卫生安全，国家大力宣传并提倡家庭及餐饮机构提供公筷，以方便取食。对此不同的人有不同的看法。请根据下表内容，写一篇英语短文。

提示词：serving chopsticks（公筷）

要求：

1．短文需涵盖表格中所有内容，可适当发挥；

2．行文连贯、条理清楚、语句通顺、语法正确、书写规范；

3．词数：80～100，开头已给出，不计入总词数。

In order to better protect be health and safety or dinning staff at the same table, many families and restaurants provide serving chopsticks._________________

【答案】

In order to better protect be health and safety or dinning staff at the same table, many families and restaurants provide serving chopsticks. Different people have different opinions about it. Some people think it is convenient, sanitary and safe to use serving chopsticks. And it can help avoid infection. Others think they often forget to use serving chopsticks. It is embarrassing to use serving chopsticks when friends and relatives gather for a meal.

In my opinion, the use of serving chopsticks is a sign of civilization. It is important to protect the health and safety of yourself and those around you. Family and friendship will not change because of serving chopsticks.

【详解】

1.题干解读：该题目属于议论文写作，题目要求根据表格提示，写一篇文章阐述不同的人对提供公筷的不同看法，并发表自己的观点。

2.写作指导：本文应该用第三人称为主来论述内容；时态采用一般现在时；在写作时，力求观点明确，论据充分，语言准确，条理清晰。

C

“绿水青山就是金山银山"，坚持节约资源和保护环境是我国的基本国策。请以”共建绿色家园”为主题，根据以下文字提示，请你写一篇英语短文向校报投稿，并适当发表自 己的观点。

注意：

（1）短文应包括所有要点；

（2）词数80-120词（开头已给出，不计入词数）；

（3）不得透露学校、姓名等任何个人信息，否则不予评分。

Let's build a green home together!

As we all know , the environment around us is getting worse and worse. ____________________________   

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【答案】

Let's build a green home together！

As we all know, the environment around us is getting worse and worse. Waste and pollution become more and more serious, which has a bad effect on our earth. As a middle school student. it's time for us to protect our earth, to help build a green home.

We must take some action. Firstly, we should often go outside on foot or by bike instead of car. Therefore, we can avoid the traffic jams and reduce the air pollution. Secondly, we had better use cloth shopping bags rather than plastic bags when we go shopping. Otherwise, using too much plastic bags may cause mountains of rubbish and pollute the land. Thirdly, turn off the light when we leave, as a result, we can save much energy. Last but not least, it is a good way to plant more threes, which can make our earth become greener and more beautiful.

【详解】

1. 题干解读：该题目属于材料作文，要求以”共建绿色家园”为主题写一篇英语短文向校报投稿。需要包括的内容有主题，必要性和四点建议。

2. 例文点评：例文用第一人称复数来进行倡议，使语言更有感染力；时态主要采用一般现在时。文章条理清晰、内容全面，材料要求的所有内容都有涉及，描述建议时还很好地应用了表示顺序的词firstly, secondly等，使得层次分明。

3. 高分亮点：

短语：worse and worse；take action；last but not least；instead of；rather than。

句型：as we all know；have an effect on；it’s time to do sth.；had better do sth.；when引导的时间状语从句；which引导的非限定性定语从句。

D

近年来中国不断取得重大的科技成就。除航空航天领域外，我国在医疗、计算机、生物、农业、基建等各个领域也取得了非凡的成就。就目前来看，我国各行各业发展迅速，跨行业、跨领域发展前景宽广。作为祖国未来的希望，你未来想从事什么行业？请以“My Dream Job”为题，写一篇英文短文，讲述你未来想要从事的工作。

要点：

1、你想从事的工作；

2、你想从事这项工作的原因；

3、你打算怎么做呢？

要求：

1、不少于80词；

2、可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3、文中不得出现真实人名和校名。

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【答案】

My Dream Job

　Everyone has his dream. My dream is to be a doctor. When I was in Grade seven, I was sick and often went to see doctors. The doctors were very friendly to me and they often cheered me up. With the help of them, I was getting better. Since then I have hoped to become a doctor. I will study hard to get more knowledge in order to achieve my dream. I'll give my love to the patients as much as possible and help them out of danger.

　　To be a doctor is really great. I think my dream will come true one day.

【详解】

1、题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作，是话题作文，谈论你未来想从事什么行业。仔细阅读提示要点，这是写作提纲，写作必须包含所有要点，但可以适当发挥。根据要点提示，作文必须包含以下三个方面：1、你想从事的工作；2、你想从事这项工作的原因；3、你打算怎么做呢？

2、写作指导：根据要点提示，本文使用多种时态，可能会使用到一般现在时、一般过去时、一般将来时、现在完成时等时态，注意时态的转换和主谓一致等问题。像表达“你想从事的工作”要使用一般现在时，表达“你想从事这项工作的原因”可以使用一般现在时，也可能使用一般过去时等时态，注意时态的选取；在表达“你打算怎么做呢？”时，使用的时态是一般将来时。叙述要条理连贯，表达清楚，注意拼写、标点、语法，书写要规范整洁。

E

今年上映的大型纪录片《厉害了！我的国》展现了我国近几年来各个领域的巨大变化和取得的伟大成就。请你以“Amazing China！”为题，从中学生的角度介绍你身边的变化。

写作要求：

1.表达清楚，语法正确，上下文连贯；

2.词数：80词左右（开头已给出，不计入总词数）；

3.文中不得出现真实的姓名，校名和地名。

参考词汇：free breakfast, shared-bikes（共享单车），high-speed train（高铁）， subway（地铁）， Wechat Pay（微信支付）， community service（社区服务），life quality

Amazing！China！

I’m very proud of my country-China, especially after watching the documentary Amazing! China. Actually, our life has changed a lot in recent years. _______________________________________________                                                       

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【答案】

Amazing! China!

I’m very proud of my country—China, especially after watching the documentary Amazing! China!. Actually, our life has changed a lot in recent years.

First, there are some shared-bikes around us. They’re very helpful and convenient for us to travel to places not too far away from our home.

Secondly, lots of restaurants offer the old and disabled people free breakfast. Besides, the government provide textbooks, meals for all the primary and junior middle school students for free. The old people over sixty ages can get some money from the government every month to feed themselves.

Thirdly, you can see high-speed trains, subways and high-speed roads everywhere in China. It shows China is developing fastest in the world.

What’s more, WeChat Pay is widely used in cities, towns and villages. The Chinese people of all ages can use their smart phones to shop online, watch the latest movies. Lots of foreigners can hardly believe their eyes.

Finally, all kinds of community services are good for Chinese people, including medical, educational and other parts of our life. All these mean we are improving our life quality.

How amazing China is! We’re proud of our country!

【详解】

这是一篇话题作文，话题是“Amazing China！”。本文人称主要是第三人称，时态主要是一般现在时。认为阅读材料，认真审题，确定主题，根据主题和所给提示列出本文的提纲，根据主题可适当发挥。短文必须包含提示内容，条理清楚，字数80词左右。要运用合适的连接词或过渡词，使文章具有连贯性，注意表达的顺序。写完以后，注意再读一遍，看看有无单词拼写、标点、语法错误（时态、主谓一致等）。本文提纲：

厉害了！中国！

我为我的祖国中国感到骄傲，尤其是在看了这部纪录片之后！中国！事实上，近年来我们的生活发生了很大的变化。

首先，我们周围有一些共享单车。它们对我们来说很有帮助，也很方便去离家不远的地方旅行。

第二，许多餐馆为老年人和残疾人提供免费早餐。此外，政府还免费为所有中小学生提供教科书、食物。60岁以上的老人每月可以从政府那里领到一些钱来养活自己。

第三，在中国到处都可以看到高速列车、地铁和高速公路。这表明中国在世界上发展最快。

此外，微信支付在城市、城镇和农村中得到了广泛的应用。所有年龄段的中国人都可以用他们的智能手机上网购物，看最新的电影。很多外国人简直不敢相信自己的眼睛。

最后，各种社区服务对中国人民都是有益的，包括医疗、教育和我们生活的其他部分。所有这些都意味着我们正在提高生活质量。

中国是多么厉害啊！我们为我们的国家感到骄傲！

【点睛】

书面表达要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。语言要规范，时态运用要正确，叙述清楚条里，信息表达清晰、完整，意思连贯。要学以致用。像First, Secondly, Thirdly, Finally表示顺序的词，使文章表达更清楚条里。（1）学习中注意总结，牢记一些固定句式及短语，写作时就可以适当引用，使文章的表达更有逻辑性，更富有条理。（2）列好提纲和要点及需要的重要短语或句型。（3）切忌堆砌词语、句子，注意运用适当的连词使句子流畅、连贯。注意表达的顺序。 （4）注意书写的规范：大小写、标点符号等的正确运用。  （5）注意检查：单词拼写、语法、动词时态、语序、主谓一致等。写作六步法：1.审题：文体，时态，人称。2.抓住要点：要点是否齐全，适当补充。3.扩充句子：通过增加状语，定语，连词，使句子意思饱满充实。4.连句成文，合理使用连词。5.改正错误：拼写是否错误，语法时态是否正确，连词是否恰当等。6.誊写作文：注意书写工整美观整洁。

F

每一个中国人都在为“中国梦”的实现而努力，我们的家乡福建也发生了巨大的变化。请描述一下家乡的变化吧，可以从环境、科技、出行方式、沟通方式等各方面进行介绍；并说一下你将如何努力为家乡建设贡献一份力。词数100左右。

注意：文中不得出现真实人名、地名、校名等。

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【答案】

Everyone has been making an effort to realize Our Chinese Dream, and at the same time, my hometown, Fujian, has changed a lot in many ways.

First, the environment in Fujian has become better and better because of our strong sense of environmental protection and our government’s efficient and wonderful methods. What’s more, with the development of science and technology, we can communicate more easily and conveniently than ever before. There is no doubt that we have more choices of going out, such as well-developed bus system and subway.

I am proud of these great changes of my hometown, so I am prepared to try my best to make it more beautiful. I have a strong desire to study hard and get into my dream senior high, then my ideal university. In the future, I will spare no effort to devote to my job, being a great teacher!

【详解】

1. 题干解读：文章是一篇话题作文，主要是以“中国梦”为主题，写出自己家乡发生的一些变化，包括环境，科技和出行自己沟通方式等方面，还要写出自己将要为家长建设要做哪些功效，把题目中的这些要求写清楚具体即可。

2. 例文点评：文章主要是分三段描写。第一段主要总述自己的家长发生了很大的变化；第二段主要写家乡各方面发生的具体的变化；第三段主要写将要为家长建设做的一些贡献。整个文章结构完整，语言表达通顺，意思明确易懂，词汇应用恰当。

3. 高分亮点：

短语：make an effort；at the same time；because of；what’s more；be proud of；spare no effort。

句型：that引导的同位语从句；so引导的并列句I am proud of these great changes of my hometown, so I am prepared to try my best to make it more beautiful.。