XiaoMingandIaregoodfriend.Weofenreadbooksandplaygamestogether.XiaoMingis12yearsold,andIam12yearsold.Butsheheavierthanme.She's35kilograms.I'am32kilograms.XiaoMingis1.41meters.I'm3cmtallerthanXiaoMing.I'm1.44meters.Weareclassmates.Wealllikedrawing.
　　Weare goodfriends! 
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　　XiaoMingandIaregoodfriends.Weofenreadbooksandplaygamestogether.XiaoMingis12yearsold,andIam12yearsold,too.Sheisheavierthanme.She's35kilograms,andI'm32kilograms.XiaoMingis1.41meters.I'm3cmtallerthanXiaoMing.Weareclassmates.Wealllikedrawing.
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