2014考研 英语作文 热门话题范文：堵车现象
As is indicated in the cartoon above,a big crowded of drivers stay in cars on the road,waiting for their turn to go,with patience almost running up(表达不准确且句子缺成分，根据图片可改为and even some people want to hold the car to go out of the long queue).In fact ,nowadays,this phenomenon reflected by the picture is so widespread,especially in super(super改为big，super表示“超级”，用在此处不合适)cities.Thanks to the fast development of economy,we have a chance to experience the more(去掉the more，rich为单音节形容词，其比较级直接在后面加-er即可) richer life.As a result of that,(第一句用thanks to表示原因，第二句用as a result of that也表示原因，这样有点繁琐，建议将两句话合为一句话，可改为and)the number of people who own cars is larger and larger.The once wide roads become narrow (汉语式英语，可改为The wide roads before become narrow now).In order to get to destination(改为destinations，每个人的目的地不一样，应用复数形式)on time,people have to set up (改为set out，set up意为“建立，创立”;set out为“出发”，注意短语的正确选择) earlier in case of being blocked.By the way ,discharging too much carbon-dioxide to the air would(改为will) destroy the environment.Therefore,it is imperative for us to take measures to change the fact.The simplest method is to diminish the times(改为time，time在表示“时间”时，为不可数名词，当“次数”讲时为可数名词) of using private transportations.There is no doubt the world would change into a better place for us to live benefited from all the efforts we devote.(汉语式英语，可改为There is no doubt that the world will be better for us to live in as long as all of us devote our efforts.) 作文能力提升，就来易优作文,https://www.euw.net
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widespread ['waidspred] 想一想再看
adj. 分布(或散布)广的，普遍的
environment [in'vaiərənmənt] 想一想再看
n. 环境，外界
diminish [di'miniʃ] 想一想再看
vt. 减少，变小，减损
vi. 变少，逐渐变
联想记忆 X 单词diminish 联想记忆：
di使+min小+ish表动词，“造成…”→缩小 作文网推荐，<A https://wWw.euzw.nEt>易优作文网</a>，中小学生学语文阅读写作的好帮手
phenomenon [fi'nɔminən] 想一想再看
n. 现象，迹象，(稀有)事件
联想记忆 X 单词phenomenon 联想记忆：
phen显示+omen预兆+on→显示预兆→现象
cartoon [kɑ:'tu:n] 想一想再看
n. 动画片，漫画
vt. 为 ... 画漫画
联想记忆 X 单词cartoon 联想记忆：
音译词。Cart＝card纸－漫画是画在纸上的。
destination [.desti'neiʃən] 想一想再看
n. 目的地，终点，景点
imperative [im'perətiv] 想一想再看
n. 命令，诫命，需要，祈使语气
adj. 命
patience ['peiʃəns] 想一想再看
n. 耐心，忍耐，毅力
n. 单人玩的牌
联想记忆 X 单词patience 联想记忆：
par[=pass]=felling感情+ience→感情，有感情就有耐心→耐心；忍受
