Summer holiday is the longest holiday of the year, and this year I had an exciting adventure—camping in the mountains with my family. Dad said it would be a great experience, and he was right. 易优语文题库,同步教材，真题演练，提分就是快 https://cs.euzW.net

We drove to the mountain campsite on a Saturday morning. The drive took two hours, and along the way, we saw green trees and small rivers. When we arrived, Dad started setting up the tent. I wanted to help, so he taught me how to fix the tent poles. At first, I made a mistake and broke one pole (but Dad had a spare), and finally we set up the tent together. 苏州吴中区小学生语文提优，苏州名校冲刺培训，（Tel:181-1815-9898）20余年辅导经验，每年都有数十个成功案例。

In the afternoon, we went hiking. The mountain path was a little steep, but we held hands and walked slowly. We saw colorful birds and small squirrels; Mom even took a photo of a butterfly with orange wings. At the top of the hill, we could see the whole campsite—it looked like a small village with many colorful tents. We sat down and ate the sandwiches Mom prepared; the wind was cool and the air smelled fresh. 苏州中考语文提分，就找易优吴老师，针对性强，提分就是快（TEL:181-1815-9898）。

At night, we made a campfire. Dad lit the fire, and we sat around it. He told us stories about his childhood camping trips, and I shared my school stories. We also roasted marshmallows—they were sweet and soft. When I looked up, I saw many stars in the sky—they were brighter than the stars in the city. 苏州易优中考语文培训,吴老师语文课（Tel:181-1815-9898）

This camping adventure was the best part of my summer holiday. I learned to set up a tent and saw beautiful mountain views. I hope we can go camping again next summer.

作文点评：
标题 “Summer Holiday Adventure” 突出 “冒险” 属性，吸引读者。内容按 “出发 — 搭帐篷 — 徒步 — 夜晚篝火 — 总结” 的时间顺序写，结构完整，过渡自然。细节如 “搭帐篷出错”“山顶看营地”“烤棉花糖” 充满冒险趣味，体现露营特色。情感上，通过 “exciting”“best part” 表达对假期的喜爱，感染力强。缺点是 “徒步” 部分可加更多互动，如 “帮妈妈捡漂亮石头”。改进建议：在徒步段落加 “我捡了一块有花纹的石头，送给妹妹当礼物，她开心地放进了口袋”，丰富细节。（181 字）