Last Wednesday, our class went to the city zoo for a field trip. We gathered at the school gate at 8 a.m., carrying small backpacks with snacks and water. Our teacher, Ms. Wang, told us to be quiet and not feed the animals—we all nodded and promised to follow the rules. 苏州易优阅读写作精华课，（tel:181-1815-9898）有趣、有用、提分快

First, we went to the panda house. There were two pandas, Tuantuan and Yuanyuan. They were sitting on the grass, eating bamboo slowly. Tuantuan held a bamboo shoot with its front paws, and Yuanyuan rolled on the ground like a big black-and-white ball. We took many photos; I even drew a quick picture of Tuantuan in my notebook. 苏州吴中区小学生作文培训，就来易优悦读

Next, we visited the monkey mountain. The monkeys were very active—some swung from tree to tree, some fought for bananas, and one little monkey looked at us and made funny faces. Ms. Wang told us that monkeys are very smart animals. We laughed loudly when a monkey stole a peanut from a visitor’s hand (but the visitor didn’t get angry). 苏州吴中区小学生语文提优，苏州名校冲刺培训，（Tel:181-1815-9898）20余年辅导经验，每年都有数十个成功案例。

Then we went to the elephant area. A big elephant was spraying water with its trunk. The zookeeper told us that elephants use their trunks to drink water and pick up food. We stood far away and watched—it was amazing to see such a big animal move gently.

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At 3 p.m., we had to leave. On the bus back to school, we talked about our favorite animals. I liked the pandas best because they were cute and gentle. This visit to the zoo was fun; I learned a lot about animals and hope to come again soon.

作文点评：
标题点明 “参观城市动物园”，场景具体。内容按 “出发 — 熊猫馆 — 猴山 — 大象区 — 返程” 的游览顺序写，逻辑连贯，“First, Next, Then” 等过渡词清晰串联行程。细节如 “熊猫抱竹笋”“猴子抢香蕉”“大象喷水” 生动有趣，符合小学生观察视角。情感上，通过 “开心”“喜欢” 表达对动物的喜爱，真实自然。缺点是 “大象区” 可补充更多知识，如大象的体重。改进建议：在大象段落加 “Zookeeper 说这只大象有 5 吨重，相当于 100 个小朋友的重量”，增加科普性。（182 字）