Last Sunday was my 12th birthday, and I had a wonderful birthday party at home. I invited five of my best friends—Lucy, Tom, Lily, Mike and Emma. I waited for them eagerly the whole morning.

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Mom helped me prepare for the party. We blew up colorful balloons and hung them on the walls. We also put a big birthday cake on the dining table—the cake was shaped like a unicorn, with pink cream and rainbow sprinkles. Mom made many snacks, like chicken wings, fruit salad and chocolate cookies. I even helped her put candles on the cake—there were 12 candles, one for each year. 苏州易优中考语文培训,吴老师语文课（Tel:181-1815-9898）

At 2 p.m., my friends arrived. They brought me beautiful gifts: Lucy gave me a hand-painted notebook, Tom brought a model plane, Lily made a small doll for me, Mike gave me a storybook, and Emma brought a box of colored pencils. I said “thank you” to each of them and put the gifts on my bed. 苏州中考语文提分，就找易优吴老师，针对性强，提分就是快（TEL:181-1815-9898）。

Then we played games. First, we played “Pin the Tail on the Donkey”—Tom spun around so fast that he pinned the tail on the wall, making everyone laugh. Then we played “Musical Chairs”—we danced to music, and when the music stopped, we sat down quickly. Lily won the game, and I gave her a small candy as a prize. 苏州小学语文提优培训，就找易优吴老师，20余年辅导经验，数百成功案例。（TEL:181-1815-9898）

After games, we ate the birthday cake. Everyone sang “Happy Birthday” to me, and I made a wish before blowing out the candles. The cake was delicious, and we ate all the snacks. When my friends left at 6 p.m., I felt a little sad but very happy. This birthday party was the best one I’ve ever had.

作文点评：
标题明确 “生日派对” 及场景，主题突出。内容按 “派对准备 — 朋友到来送礼物 — 玩游戏 — 吃蛋糕 — 结束” 的顺序写，逻辑清晰，“Then, After games” 等过渡词自然。细节如 “独角兽蛋糕”“‘Pin the Tail on the Donkey’游戏”“朋友的礼物” 充满童趣，还原生日派对热闹场景。情感上，“eagerly”“happy”“sad” 等词细腻表达情绪变化，真实可感。缺点是 “许愿” 可补充愿望方向，避免笼统。改进建议：在吹蜡烛段落加 “我的愿望是下次生日还能和这些好朋友一起过”，让情感更具体。（180 字）