Yesterday morning, I woke up to a white world—it snowed! It was the first snowfall of this winter, and I jumped out of bed happily to watch the snow.

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I ran to the window and looked outside. The snow was falling slowly from the sky, like small white feathers. The roof of the house next door was covered with snow, looking like a white hat. The trees in the yard were also white—their branches were covered with snow, like sugar-coated sticks. Even the road was white, and people walked slowly on it, leaving small footprints. 苏州易优中考语文培训,吴老师语文课（Tel:181-1815-9898）

After breakfast, I put on my warm coat, hat, gloves and boots, and went outside to play. My little brother went with me. First, we made a snowman. I rolled a big snowball for the body and a small one for the head. My brother found two black buttons for the eyes and a red carrot for the nose. We put my dad’s old scarf around the snowman’s neck—it looked so cute! 苏州易优吴老师中考语文提分班（TEL:181-1815-9898）有趣、有用、提分快

Then we had a snowball fight. I made a small snowball and threw it at my brother—hit his arm! He laughed and threw one back at me, but I dodged it. We ran around the yard, throwing snowballs and laughing loudly. Our faces turned red from the cold, but we didn’t care. 苏州易优中考语文培训,吴老师语文课（Tel:181-1815-9898）

When we went home at noon, our clothes were a little wet, but we were very happy. The snowfall made the world beautiful, and playing with snow was so fun. I hope it snows again soon.

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