雅思写作经典错误解析——累赘
九． 累赘(redundancy)
　　言以简洁为贵。写句子没有一个多余的词；写段落没有一个无必要的句子。能用单词的不用词组；能用词组的不用从句或句子。如：
　　in spite of the fact that he is lazy, i like him.
　　本句的“the fact that he is lazy”系同谓语从句，我们按照上述“能用词组的不用从句”可以改为：in spite of his laziness, i like him.
　　例１． for the people who are diligent and kind, money is just the thing to be used to buy the thing they need.
　　剖析：整个句子可以大大简化。
　　改为：
　　diligent, caring people use money only to buy what they need.